tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post5763280217764959325..comments2023-09-19T05:00:33.470-07:00Comments on vision: Sumana Royhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17333363799083094084noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-65777784988730582942014-08-02T16:22:06.037-07:002014-08-02T16:22:06.037-07:00This is lovely Sumana, you have worked the 5th and...This is lovely Sumana, you have worked the 5th and 6th lines so very cleverly.Michaelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07512953735819338268noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-7599629009129103012014-08-02T07:15:38.465-07:002014-08-02T07:15:38.465-07:00Enjoyed this a lot...you have beautifully crafted ...Enjoyed this a lot...you have beautifully crafted this one Sumana...Arathi Hariharhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17142420236345157881noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-19434904330216536132014-08-02T02:09:11.289-07:002014-08-02T02:09:11.289-07:00Very well done, and I like the choice of topic.Very well done, and I like the choice of topic.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-18773883250049179062014-08-01T19:36:52.375-07:002014-08-01T19:36:52.375-07:00I've seem that video...but then again who hasn...I've seem that video...but then again who hasn't....I really liked the line "To endure the little brother is the bite." you weaved this paradelle quite well.RMPhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04054771419356465116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-9513627864316890642014-08-01T19:17:38.117-07:002014-08-01T19:17:38.117-07:00A classic offering Sumana! That video brought out ...A classic offering Sumana! That video brought out the full impact of a jovial nature in a painful experience. Very well done Ma'am!<br /><br />Hankkaykualahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03240206222973305395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-81952781917634299562014-08-01T18:40:29.362-07:002014-08-01T18:40:29.362-07:00I was the author of the comment that was deleted b...I was the author of the comment that was deleted because I forgot to put my correct online identity. I like your piece - it is one of those that elevated the form above the parody that it was originally intended to be. This is a beautiful piece of writing and meditation on the brotherly vignette that I also enjoyed watching a few years ago.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-4709652356980792672014-08-01T18:32:24.134-07:002014-08-01T18:32:24.134-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Imeldahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00477386880496665001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-74450005058317359172014-08-01T12:47:16.494-07:002014-08-01T12:47:16.494-07:00Wow. You did such a good job with this. I love i...Wow. You did such a good job with this. I love it. The last line is superb. Myrna R.https://www.blogger.com/profile/15088915165678737118noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-22231555154306965002014-08-01T11:45:18.492-07:002014-08-01T11:45:18.492-07:00So clever - the video so well known and your pain ...So clever - the video so well known and your pain and joy take is perfect - KAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-33692232961170164692014-08-01T03:16:58.428-07:002014-08-01T03:16:58.428-07:00heh-heh - what a great response to Brian's pro...heh-heh - what a great response to Brian's prompt! :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-74193816976120595902014-07-31T22:30:21.972-07:002014-07-31T22:30:21.972-07:00That was really, really good...!That was really, really good...!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18329773014118837806noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-82061539915332475082014-07-31T22:08:37.991-07:002014-07-31T22:08:37.991-07:00If they were unaware they were being taped it migh...If they were unaware they were being taped it might make a difference in the outcome, but it works for your purpose in the form we write in today...this was clever and fun..and not malicious biting..kids will be kids.Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-62219683980587702902014-07-31T20:48:59.051-07:002014-07-31T20:48:59.051-07:00And then when you watch the video and see the olde...And then when you watch the video and see the older practically beg to have his finger bitten, the meaning changes again. I'm glad your moral finger glued joy to pain. Both these kids are going to have strange adult behaviors.Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-5125620008394157792014-07-31T20:16:02.843-07:002014-07-31T20:16:02.843-07:00Excellent approach to this prompt. A difficult for...Excellent approach to this prompt. A difficult form I think but you made it work.Peggyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10811244438243200435noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-78169070179432383162014-07-31T16:14:40.522-07:002014-07-31T16:14:40.522-07:00You've pulled the paradelle form off beautiful...You've pulled the paradelle form off beautifully, with humor - and with a bit of a tongue-in-cheek parody of strict poetic forms, that Poet Laureate Billy Collins intended for the paradelle. Very well executied.Wendy Bourkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09475940407969993348noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-56744764406689525152014-07-31T15:45:22.068-07:002014-07-31T15:45:22.068-07:00loved how you put this in a real life situationloved how you put this in a real life situationWolfsrosebudhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17295258422523621134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-1626545146741072142014-07-31T15:01:17.034-07:002014-07-31T15:01:17.034-07:00This is brilliant. I totally loved it! Elder kids ...This is brilliant. I totally loved it! Elder kids endure a lot!Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-16499785369178307752014-07-31T14:53:21.865-07:002014-07-31T14:53:21.865-07:00Ha, well the older child doesn't seem to be in...Ha, well the older child doesn't seem to be in all that much pain. Smiles. He seems to have enjoyed the experience in a way. And yes, you wonder about the parent as you write your poem. I do too. What kind of parent would take a video of one child biting another. You worked the paradelle form well, Sumana. Bravo.Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-29393055834620325672014-07-31T14:49:32.786-07:002014-07-31T14:49:32.786-07:00I like the light feeling of your paradelle, Sumana...I like the light feeling of your paradelle, Sumana. Great last stanza! You have made me want to look at that video. Gabriellahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09968615376035959259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-46087463027250463402014-07-31T14:16:08.252-07:002014-07-31T14:16:08.252-07:00Brilliant! You obviously had a lot of fun with th...Brilliant! You obviously had a lot of fun with this, and you made the "mixed up" lines have meaning of their own!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-10293825641018296792014-07-31T14:05:44.068-07:002014-07-31T14:05:44.068-07:00Of course, it hurts, it hurts ~ Very fun approach...Of course, it hurts, it hurts ~ Very fun approach, I like it Sumana ~ Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-79913703847659760362014-07-31T13:02:37.254-07:002014-07-31T13:02:37.254-07:00Now this was a novel approach to the prompt; if Br...Now this was a novel approach to the prompt; if Brian & Billy Collins can have so much fun with a faux French form, why not take it to the next level of levity? Still smiling, I like the line /my moral finger glued joy to pain/.Glenn Buttkushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10680725814199700692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-25672375287901394052014-07-31T12:43:43.676-07:002014-07-31T12:43:43.676-07:00Ha..yes that little video is really viral.. Love t...Ha..yes that little video is really viral.. Love the end.. I'm sure Charlie's teeth are the sharpest things.brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5867053657182353336.post-41290054723947923482014-07-31T12:30:21.790-07:002014-07-31T12:30:21.790-07:00hahahaha i am totally reading this to my boys...th...hahahaha i am totally reading this to my boys...they love that video...and have it on their phones...and replay it all the time...the brother bitten is so cute...his voice...lolBrian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com