Wednesday, 4 September 2013






 RUSTY HOME

What an amazing world…….
I’ve never looked at it in this way
Cubes, spheres, cylinders all around
Pulsating with life
Drapes whispering stories of labor
On built in wood stand my angels
Carrying love, sigh, wisdom in their bosom
And wonders will never cease
Rainbow has struck the garden
The trees have metamorphosed
 Into huge bouquet
Amidst all these
Time’s chuckle is heard
In murmur of dry petals and leaves
His fiery smiles hang
 On squares and cubes and spheres

For : Poetry Jam : Rust
       :  Poets United : Verse First : Right Under Your Nose

      

34 comments:


  1. time is always the winner...so...

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  2. Yes, what an amazing world this is in so many ways!! I like picturing how the trees have metamorphosed into a huge bouquet.

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  3. thanks for the comments Mary.... :)

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  4. memories en crafted. (i saw your name shortlisted at raedleaf poetry competition:) congrats!!)

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    1. thanks Vandana for your visit..i think there is a little bit mistaken identity problem here..i am not sumana roy of raedleaf poetry...she lives in jalpaiguri. we share the same name only.

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  5. "What an amazing world……./I’ve never looked at it in this way"- It is not always easy to look at the world we know with new yes but you poem shows that the gain is ours if we succeed.

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  6. nice...really cool visuals and it is a pretty amazing world at times....and there is so much beauty when we look for it....

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  7. I love the imagery in this piece, especially the trees forming themselves into a bouquet! Cool.

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  8. Your attention to detail and description is really effective. Nice addition to the group. Thanks for sharing.

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    1. thanks Kim for your kind words.......

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  9. I like this part:

    Time’s chuckle is heard
    In murmur of dry petals and leaves

    Good one ~

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  10. I've been doing a creative study of time so the chuckle of Time is apropos as his hands tick tock to the last second of the year
    nicely written

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    1. Time in His 'winged chariot' leaves nothing....thanks for the visit and your nice words..

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  11. Pulsing, whispering, sighing,change, change, change sp mightily alive! Well might time chuckle and smile.

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    1. thanks Susan for your words of appreciation...

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  12. LLoved the way you fit them into spheres and cubes. Kind of make them tangible and the feeling evolves!

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    1. thanks Akila for your visit and nice words...

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  13. Loved everything about this..the shapes..the tress..so true wonders will never cease :)

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  14. Its the creativity in the writer that keeps the reader engrossed and captivates her thinking ...so lovely!

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  15. This has so many levels, like a kaleidoscope of colour that changes every time you read it. It is quite captivating.

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  16. I like "trees metamorphosed into a huge bouquet" Lovely images. :)

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  17. I really like time's chuckle and your close!

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  18. having recently immersed myself in Escher's art, i find myself seeing geometric form in nature far more than i used to - love your poem

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    1. thanks for your nice words...nature has so many secrets hidden in her...... :)

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