TREES
Tuesday, 6 May 2014
TREES
You are still the same ancient sage
Epitome of calm forbearance
We thrive on our greed, might and rage
Forgetting our past war we wage
Against you who shows no grievance
You are still the same ancient sage
Blessing us with life as you age
Harboring us without pretence
We thrive on our greed, might and rage
Indulge in killing and carnage
Your bounties speak of tolerance
You are still the same ancient sage
Grounded with a verdant visage
We have our brazen insolence
We thrive on our greed, might and rage
We comb your home for horn, plumage
We know silence is your parlance
You are still the same ancient sage
We thrive on our greed, might and rage
Posted for d’Verse Poets Pub where the
prompt is Tree
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the form and repetition is really effective in this...and i like the contrast you draw as well between them and us...their bounties speaking to tolerence and ours to greed....
ReplyDeletePowerful, and sadly true. ;)
ReplyDeleteI like how you have contrasted man in comparison to the tree.
ReplyDeleteI really like the flow and the form of this... the contrast you draw is very powerful...
ReplyDeletethere couldn't be a bigger contrast... the form and repetition underlines your message well sumana
ReplyDeleteI love the repetition of "you are still the same ancient sage"........fantastic, Sumana!
ReplyDelete:) very true that is why we worship the trees, so sacred they are.
ReplyDeleteVery effective repetitions, Sumana. Trees often appear as old sages indeed.
ReplyDeleteYes, I can see how they are revered and treated as almost human, respected for their age and ascribed wisdom
ReplyDeleteWhat a meaningful poem, Sumana. I definitely like thinking of a tree as a sage.
ReplyDeleteThe contrasts in your poem pierce the heart. I like the repetition and your powerful words.
ReplyDeleteAh.. you sneak in a brilliant Villanelle here.. and how well you use the repeated lines.. they are always our friends despite what we do against them
ReplyDeleteThe repetition comes flawlessly giving it the desired effect making the contrast sharper...loved it..
ReplyDeleteVery nicely done. I like how this flows.
ReplyDeleteYes, you used form and repetition so well to drive this one home. Well done.
ReplyDeletepowerful and supple pen, Sumana ~
ReplyDeleteThe form is used beautifully to reinforce the images you give us.
ReplyDeleteThe repetition and contrast between the trees and us is masterfully done.
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