any picture comes to my mind,
i try to give it a body of words,
love to sit on other blooms,
for honey, color, fragrance........
the form and repetition is really effective in this...and i like the contrast you draw as well between them and us...their bounties speaking to tolerence and ours to greed....
Powerful, and sadly true. ;)
I like how you have contrasted man in comparison to the tree.
I really like the flow and the form of this... the contrast you draw is very powerful...
there couldn't be a bigger contrast... the form and repetition underlines your message well sumana
I love the repetition of "you are still the same ancient sage"........fantastic, Sumana!
:) very true that is why we worship the trees, so sacred they are.
Very effective repetitions, Sumana. Trees often appear as old sages indeed.
Yes, I can see how they are revered and treated as almost human, respected for their age and ascribed wisdom
What a meaningful poem, Sumana. I definitely like thinking of a tree as a sage.
The contrasts in your poem pierce the heart. I like the repetition and your powerful words.
Ah.. you sneak in a brilliant Villanelle here.. and how well you use the repeated lines.. they are always our friends despite what we do against them
The repetition comes flawlessly giving it the desired effect making the contrast sharper...loved it..
Very nicely done. I like how this flows.
Yes, you used form and repetition so well to drive this one home. Well done.
powerful and supple pen, Sumana ~
The form is used beautifully to reinforce the images you give us.
The repetition and contrast between the trees and us is masterfully done.
Thank you for stopping by and sharing your valuable thoughts.........