any picture comes to my mind, i try to give it a body of words, love to sit on other blooms, for honey, color, fragrance........
Tuesday, 22 July 2014
TIME / CLOCKS
I could taste time’s softness
In the juicy golden mangoes
I could smell time’s fragrance
In the bosom of my mother
And how can I ever forget
That velvet touch of time
In the palm of my childhood friends
I saw time’s soft smile
In my father’s face
When he took that snap
Of his first born going to school
For the first time
Time’s melodious tune
In the voice of music teacher
Still rings and echoes
I always thought time
As slow, tender, loving, friendly, colorful
and musical
Until those two unforgiving
Hands of clock made this world go
Topsy turvy, rough and harsh
Dragging time in an incredible pace
To a barren land
To an unfamiliar home
To this impossible world
Smeared
with blood
Where fragmented shelters
Drive everyone out in the street
Where children are fed with bombs
Where only two languages are spoken
Fear and tears
Where the Paradise is lost forever
Mutated Hollowmen
have seized this Earth
They will not stop until
Our living place is the
dead land
Until time is burned
And becomes mere ash
The words in red are from T.S. Eliot’s
Hollowmen
Posted for d’Verse Pub Poetics where the prompt is Time / Clocks
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A very strong & diverse take on the prompt, Sumana; starting out so gently, sweeting, treacle dripping off nice safe warm images & memories; then BAM, just as I was think, "very lovely, but that's not the world I live in", you shift the focus, the POV out of the halcyon & into the horrible, where millions struggle as we write. Like your line /where children are fed with bombs/. How are things there living in tomorrow anyway?
ReplyDeleteHow sad the turn of fate from carefree, happy & musical life to one of Paradise lost, our living place, a dead land ~ I specially like the powerful closing lines ~
ReplyDeleteVery effective contrast between the sweet memories and today's harsh reality. I cannot stand to look at Facebook and see so much hatred and misunderstanding at the moment. I hope we soon revert to using languages that are not fear and tears.
ReplyDeleteSumana, the contrast between the beginning of the poem and the conclusion is so very stunning - something the reader does not expect - something that takes the reader by surprise. As the poem concludes, we all come to understand how time has changed for many...as it becomes the ash of Paradise lost! Powerful writing, Sumana.
ReplyDeleteNo did not expect the turn of events in your poem but I know in the blink of an eye many peoples' lives are turned upside down. You illustrate that contrast very effectively, Sunama. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteYour first line pulled me in - so soft and lovely - and then the shocking turn - very effective and affecting -
ReplyDeleteExcellent work--childhood can have so many happy memories, and then we grow up and become more aware of the cruelties and horrors around us. Nicely done, very moving piece!
ReplyDeleteoh heck... i love how you start so gentle with time's softness and those beautiful memories and then the break to the wars... the fear and tear language... love how the emotions come across and the contrast... well done
ReplyDeleteThe second part of your poem felt like a virtual bomb in my heart. You shocked me with truth, from which I cannot escape. Life is not always sweet, especially for those in the midst of wars. But in a sense we all are warring, because we all suffer even if only a few are victimized. Good writing here.
ReplyDeleteVery strong, powerful writing.. started out as sweet, nostalgic, straight from the heart writing.. and ended on an intense note... wow...
ReplyDeletePowerful message. The world is going awry. We need more poets and artists of all disciplines to civilise the world.
ReplyDeleteWow! I loved this. The contrast is so effective and, sadly, so true. Beautiful write!
ReplyDeleteFrom the innocence and safety of childhood to today, "where the Paradise is lost forever". This is moving, Sumana. So sad the world we inhabit as children and the one we live in now, with our eyes open.
ReplyDeleteWow! Such a contrast between the innocence and beauty of childhood and the harsh reality of today. Great imagery, Sumana. Very effective.
ReplyDeleteLove the exploration of time through the senses and the harsh reality of where we find ourselves today.
ReplyDeleteYou have combined some beautiful images with some stark and grotesque ones. So well done and you make such a valid point Sumana. So very well done.
ReplyDeleteTime can be tarnished...from the beauty of childhood to the rough reality that we can face in this day and age. A powerful write Sumana!
ReplyDeletea very intense end...I liked the quite peaceful start, which lulls the reader as it did the writer and then turns things upside down in a similar fashion to the feelings expressed. nicely done.
ReplyDeletevery intense and very true. sad but true if i may say. so much to take from time and yet we choose shades of grey. yes! we choose
ReplyDeleteWonderfully handled change of tone - from the very soft velvety lines to the strongest tones at the end. Very well done indeed.
ReplyDeleteTis sad when paradise is lost.. a thought provoking write..
ReplyDeleteWhat a contrast, "Where only two languages are spoken
ReplyDeleteFear and tears" are to the beginning of this poem.
loved the softness of time..and how have shows how callous it is now..very powerful poem:)
ReplyDeleteTime... Friendly except when the selfish and hateful choose to abuse that time.
ReplyDeletelove the opening part on seeing time in the people of your family...and experiencing it through them...that is very cool...interesting turn toward the end as well....
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