MORNING
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The golden iris of her
Softly stares
Pink clouds are her
Shy words
Her river dream
Meanders away
Wavy hands catches
The warmth
While icy darkness
Fades and hides
The morning slowly
Pledges to shine
(35 words)
Posted
for Brian’s prompt: write with 40 words or less @ d’Verse MTB
i love mornings... and you capture the magic beautifullly...those first sunrays, purple clouds... i will ride my bike to work tomorrow...into the sunrise...smiles
ReplyDeleteThe pledge of the morning.. the promises in a new dawn.. I really love that. really...
ReplyDeletelove the pink clouds as her shy words written on the sky...
ReplyDeletewhat a beautiful morning rising up from your words...
This is lovely, Sumana. You have really evoked the birth of a mountain and found a wonderful photo to illustrate your concept as well.
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful beginning if day you have captured, Sumana! I like the image of the pink clouds being shy words too.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite time of the day ~ Love the opening lines ~
ReplyDeletewonderful sumana!! and you beat me... i couldnt do less than 40!! :)
ReplyDeleteWe tied at 35, cool. like Brian, I loved lines /pink clouds are her shy words/. Now retired, I do enjoy my mornings, but midnight oil for writing, watching movies pleases me too.
ReplyDeleteWhat lines you have there! The pink clouds! Mmmmm! And accordingly every line that follows. Beautiful poetry.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed a lot of the phrasing you use here ... icy darkness, river dream.
ReplyDeleteWavy hands catches
ReplyDeleteThe warmth
While icy darkness
Fades and hides - my favorite; great write
This aurora, personified dawn, is welcome to visit me whenever she can!
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful Sumana. Makes me want to rise early to catch those pink hues, see the pledge written in the sky. But gotta be honest I usually sleep through it. Sad. But I do catch the sunsets.
ReplyDeleteA gorgeous glittering poem - perfect.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. I was out when the sun appeared this morning, on my misty lake... You captured it.
ReplyDeleteMagnificent! and outstanding piece.
ReplyDeleteI like this poem of yours very much. :)
Beautiful all but that ending is so stunning.
ReplyDeleteThe feeling is so serene and yet the visuals are stunning.
ReplyDeleteAs a morning person I so connected with the images you create Sumana, Very well done.
ReplyDeletePink clouds are her shy words. Lovely
ReplyDeleteThis is a lovely description of sunrise. Simply beautiful!
ReplyDeleteStunning poem...pledges to shine!
ReplyDeleteJust beautiful Sumana.
ReplyDeleteI love the optimism of this.
ReplyDeletesweet morning..beautiful lines...Sumana:)
ReplyDeleteBeautifully done!
ReplyDelete"The morning slowly
ReplyDeletePledges to shine"
Your words capture the optimism of a new day.
That was an enjoyable picture of the girl and the boy. It reveals an essential thing, the infinite darkness in the background. Very well done!
ReplyDelete" While icy darkness Fades and hides . . " love that description.
ReplyDeleteThe morning slowly
ReplyDeletePledges to shine
There is hope yet for those who care. Nicely Sumana!
Hank
Pledges of the morning..a fresh start a new day..lovely
ReplyDeleteYour poem matches the picture very well.
ReplyDeleteDelicately lovely!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. I love the idea of the clouds being her words. It definitely sounds like a promising morning.
ReplyDeleteso beautiful..... :-)
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