any picture comes to my mind,
i try to give it a body of words,
love to sit on other blooms,
for honey, color, fragrance........
The repetition of "I am from the Devine Desire" pounds this home. Mythical, mysterious - like a religious chant this so deeply marks a deepness in where you are from. Excellent! Hayes Spencer is Kanzensakura
WOW! I am speechless. You have outdone yourself. A brilliant write, Sumana!
To know one's life as ONE with the land one lives onis to be at peace with all that is kNOWnfrom underfoot..:)
That took me on such a magical journey - and that perfect conclusion! Trying to give all that diversity and richness a single name... A wonderfu flow of a poem, Sumana!
What magic in this.. the repetitions and that final line really tie it all together to a wonderful story..really a magnificent write.
Whew, Sumana, you were REALLY inspired. I am really awed by your words that seem to come from a deep place. I am the oceanEmbracing the streams of all FaithsIn my vast bosomSumana, this is a poem to FEEL in one's heart and soul. This is inspiration.
I am amazed that the words just came to you, Sumana. I also like how the closing lines through a different light on your poem. A wonderful tribute to your country!
This is beautiful Sumana. Your love of India comes through. Love the way you write of its struggles, its faith and its strength. Clearly, India is within you.
More than most, your country is reflected in you, who you became, & who you are; Mother India, mother earth, Miss Natural, with a strong vein of spiritual zeal as well; a grand gesture as response to the prompt, giving us the sense that even on these poetic scales, you are much more still. I like the lines /I am the flute/of eternal lovers/.
This is absolutely marvellous - the flow and the strange names, unknown to a European, make the magic.
I found myself replying verbally to this while I was reading it. Very powerful. It transported me to the very heart of your existence!
i love the personification here - and how you fill the outlines of the land with color, scent and history
I can feel your love for your homeland in these words.
Absolutely amazing. The beauty of I AM.
i like the witness with the wound still oozing from despair. very powerful.My Brain is a Cheap Gadget That Spins
A dramatic love song to your country, Sumana, which is even more moving when read aloud.
I very much enjoyed your colorful and imaginative description of India. A wonderful glimpse!
This puts a great light on our country... It was vivid, it was serene and it was powerful. It is a good reminder of our rich heritage when I take a look around. Thank you for this!~Prajakta
They've said it all before, the magic, the enchantment... All that's left for me is to agree. And to thank you for introducing ideas that are new to me, like the Divine Desire. As much as I've read before, I don't remember I ever came across it. So thanks :-)
a national anthem, a love poem!
the repeated line gave this a generational feel
A beautiful dedication to the legacy of Bharat, I hope we Barthiyas remember it and try to maintain it.
I came back for another read and this poem just blows me away with its deep spirituality, wisdom, and beauty. Best "where I am from" poem I have ever read. Wonderful to have such a faith, Sumana. Wow.
Seriously, and frankly, this is stunning, just stunning, every line, word and syllable, and together as verse. As we have finished a month in India at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai, and because of prior knowledge as well, I was SO thrilled to really understand what you were saying, in detail - which really made it an exciting, fascinating read - and not a tame one, you really hit hard in parts, but where was the Ganges..
Oh thank you Hamish..you really detected the flaw..I ought to have included the Ganges or our goddess Ganga...ugh..how could I have missed the vein of India? sigh...
Part exclamation of who you are, part prayer, entirely beautiful!
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