Sunday, 17 November 2013




           BLOOD


    Three word commitment

Her conspicuous pink flush

    Lights up his Eden



     Forbidden fruits hang

 Serpents swear to stir the blood

   Blithe spirits ignore 


Posted for Haiku Heights : Prompt-Blood
 & shared with Poetry Pantry @ Poets United
  & Open Link Monday @ Real Toads
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28 comments:

  1. Mary17 November 2013 at 01:52

    Oh, those serpents can be sly!!

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  2. rallentanda17 November 2013 at 04:13

    I like the three word commitment:)

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  3. humbird17 November 2013 at 05:05

    ...the thirst of unknown...nice haiku

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  4. Brian Miller17 November 2013 at 05:21

    ha. yeah i bet she lit up eden....smiles....gotta watch temptation....then again, if we ignored it all where would we be?

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  5. Anonymous17 November 2013 at 05:38

    Nice. Serpents stirring the blood... good one. :-)
    -HA

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  6. scotthastiepoet17 November 2013 at 05:46

    Deliciously done - a little jewel Sumana... With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com

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  7. Brother Ollie17 November 2013 at 06:21

    cool haiku - with very vivid imagery - I dig it!

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  8. Anand S Unni17 November 2013 at 06:46

    Beautifully crafted haiku. I always am of the opinion that writing a haiku is hard job. Never tried one, but I think you made it well.

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  9. Abin Chakraborty17 November 2013 at 08:04

    loved the compactness and the biblical allusions.

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  10. Natašek17 November 2013 at 09:56

    really wonderful.. loved the images.

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  11. Kerry O'Connor17 November 2013 at 10:36

    Those three words can promise both happiness and many complications too.

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  12. Gabriella17 November 2013 at 12:06

    Very good haiku! I too enjoyed the subtle biblical references.

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  13. Eileen T O'Neill .....17 November 2013 at 12:43

    Sumana,

    Rather emotional moments held within your cleverly chosen words...

    Eileen

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  14. Angelika Poe17 November 2013 at 13:51

    it sounds a little creepy, right?

    Geli

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  15. Empty nester at last17 November 2013 at 15:44

    Love it...can sooo picture it.. Great job!

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  16. Anonymous17 November 2013 at 18:24

    Very well written. Fluid and vivid,

    Elizabeth

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  17. Vandana Sharma17 November 2013 at 19:54

    I can feel snake slithering....

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  18. J Cosmo Newbery18 November 2013 at 01:58

    Great imagery.

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  19. kaykuala18 November 2013 at 04:58

    Great images from your perfect choice of words. You conveyed the message most distinctly Sumana!

    Hank

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  20. dsnake118 November 2013 at 05:12

    interesting takes on the prompt. i like the second one, i think it's a new twist to a familiar tale. :)

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  21. Anonymous18 November 2013 at 08:00

    Great and unique take, Sumana.

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  22. gautami tripathy18 November 2013 at 08:38

    Excellent writing! I am glad to be here!

    bridging the past with the
    future

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  23. Sherry Blue Sky18 November 2013 at 12:54

    Beautiful!

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  24. Susie Clevenger18 November 2013 at 15:35

    So lovely!!

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  25. Reshma18 November 2013 at 16:12

    Brilliantly done Sumana, the world is rosy when the heart is in love :)

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  26. Jim18 November 2013 at 19:33

    My vote goes for the second one, Sumana. Blood would be hard to write for, you did really good.
    ..

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  27. Anonymous18 November 2013 at 21:32

    luscious ~

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  28. Unknown19 November 2013 at 13:55

    Both are really good, but I like the second one best. Well done! ♥

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