Sunday, 17 November 2013




           BLOOD


    Three word commitment

Her conspicuous pink flush

    Lights up his Eden



     Forbidden fruits hang

 Serpents swear to stir the blood

   Blithe spirits ignore 


Posted for Haiku Heights : Prompt-Blood
 & shared with Poetry Pantry @ Poets United
  & Open Link Monday @ Real Toads

29 comments:

  1. Oh, those serpents can be sly!!

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  2. I like the three word commitment:)

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  3. ...the thirst of unknown...nice haiku

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  4. ha. yeah i bet she lit up eden....smiles....gotta watch temptation....then again, if we ignored it all where would we be?

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  5. Nice. Serpents stirring the blood... good one. :-)
    -HA

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  6. Deliciously done - a little jewel Sumana... With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com

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  7. cool haiku - with very vivid imagery - I dig it!

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  8. Beautifully crafted haiku. I always am of the opinion that writing a haiku is hard job. Never tried one, but I think you made it well.

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  9. loved the compactness and the biblical allusions.

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  10. really wonderful.. loved the images.

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  11. Those three words can promise both happiness and many complications too.

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  12. Very good haiku! I too enjoyed the subtle biblical references.

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  13. The garden of Eden and those 3 little words ... lovely imagery :)

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  14. Sumana,

    Rather emotional moments held within your cleverly chosen words...

    Eileen

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  15. it sounds a little creepy, right?

    Geli

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  16. Love it...can sooo picture it.. Great job!

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  17. Very well written. Fluid and vivid,

    Elizabeth

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  18. Great images from your perfect choice of words. You conveyed the message most distinctly Sumana!

    Hank

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  19. interesting takes on the prompt. i like the second one, i think it's a new twist to a familiar tale. :)

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  20. Brilliantly done Sumana, the world is rosy when the heart is in love :)

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  21. My vote goes for the second one, Sumana. Blood would be hard to write for, you did really good.
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  22. Both are really good, but I like the second one best. Well done! ♥

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