Sunday, 22 December 2013




        A TANKA
           
On the white darkness
A pale orange flow trickles
Grasses melt in joy
Stretchy days on sparrow’s wings
Listen to the twittering

 Written for Kerry's When I Write Tanka (Part1) ~ Hisashi Nakamura @ Real Toads
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22 comments:

  1. Mary22 December 2013 at 00:57

    I like the way that you have written a tanka that we can see and hear, Sumana. I enjoyed the uniqueness of the idea of white darkness.

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  2. J Cosmo Newbery22 December 2013 at 01:40

    I have never managed to write a Tanka. You make it look easier than I suspect it is.

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  3. Gabriella22 December 2013 at 01:56

    Very evocative tanka, Sumana!

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  4. Jinksy22 December 2013 at 02:42

    Days stretch out like sparrow's wings...

    Lovely idea.

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  5. Kerry O'Connor22 December 2013 at 03:10

    Yes, I do like those stretchy wings. This is a timely reminder that spring will soon return.

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  6. Brian Miller22 December 2013 at 04:47

    ha. spring will be here soon enough...i like the use of the colors in this....

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  7. Grace22 December 2013 at 05:07

    I like the grass melting in joy ~ Lovely tanka, thanks ~

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  8. Vandana Sharma22 December 2013 at 05:59

    I love the stretching on sparrow's wing:)

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  9. Susan22 December 2013 at 06:39

    Mmmmm. Seems a surreal landscape to me with the welcoming of birds and warmth.

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  10. Eileen T O'Neill .....22 December 2013 at 07:00

    Sumana,

    I read your poem as my garden was busy with so many birds. Loved the life in your words and seeing the hope ahead...

    Happy Christmas and Festive Holiday season Sumana:)
    Eileen

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  11. dsnake122 December 2013 at 07:43

    Nice! i liked the joyfulness in this poem. :)

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  12. Anonymous22 December 2013 at 09:06

    Nice. Great imagery in your words. Serene.
    -HA

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  13. cheryl22 December 2013 at 11:19

    Lovely ! Wishing for twittering already.

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  14. Mademoiselle Modelle22 December 2013 at 11:45

    Lovely with on the white darkness.

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  15. Susie Clevenger22 December 2013 at 13:23

    "grasses melt in joy" love that. Beautiful tanka

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  16. kaykuala22 December 2013 at 16:55

    Their twittering can melt the savage heart. Of bird sounds one gets mesmerized! Nicely Sumana!

    Hank

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  17. Anonymous22 December 2013 at 20:20

    Really like the idea of days stretching out like sparrow's wings. May your holiday be blessed,

    Elizabeth

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  18. paperdollmom22 December 2013 at 23:44

    Such a light and wonderful poem. Especially during the winter!

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  19. Aditi23 December 2013 at 00:47

    Simply wow...'white darkness' loved this!!

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  20. ND Mitchell23 December 2013 at 03:04

    The "white darkness" image hooked me. Lovely imagery.

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  21. TALON23 December 2013 at 07:23

    Just such beautiful imagery, Sumana. Reading this makes me feel light and happy.

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  22. Anonymous23 December 2013 at 17:14

    Beautiful poem! I love the succinct simplicity! Happy holidays to you!

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