FLY AWAY PEACE
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Scarlet sky storming furiously
Spewing hatred, venom, anger
Released from serpentine hearts
Darkening dreamy eyes
Death’s dizzy delight
Noor-al-Najdi*’s
Lips’ slip sealed
White Dove
Groans
*a ten year old girl killed in Rafah by
Israel bombing
(The poem is a Nonet that has nine lines. The
first line has nine syllables, the second eight syllables and so on until line
nine that finishes with one syllable)
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What a misery the Middle East is. Why does it have to always end in groans? Well captured, but sadly so.
ReplyDeleteWe are overwhelmed with this all pervading misery all over the world. Never ending. Heartrending. No let-up it seems.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is powerfully chaotic! It's melancholy but very alive
ReplyDeletePowerful poem, you nailed the nonet structure which should have been hard to write. Btw, I shared a poem about the same issue too. It is heart breaking to see the things happening in Israel.
ReplyDeletepowerful, pain well captured. death is alive here.
ReplyDeleteVery sad when children are caught in gunfire or are victims of war ~ Each side has its own reasons but for me, war is deplorable specially when the innocents are killed ~
ReplyDeleteYou have nailed it, Sumana. The white dove seems to have flown away, and at the moment there looks like there is little chance it will return. A poignant poem.
ReplyDeleteugh. i feel much the same in thinking of the kids fleeing south america...fleeing hte violence of their peers....9 year olds killing 7 year olds for refusal to pay protection money...ugh....tight little verse....
ReplyDeleteNumbing tragedy
ReplyDeleteSuch a tragedy unfolding.
ReplyDeleteNo doves of peace in that situation. The childrens' faces are painful to look upon. Their eyes are a plea to adults to stop the madness.
ReplyDeleteoh yes, the white dove had flown away. (or maybe had been shot too) :(
ReplyDeleteInteresting form. It looks like one wing of a dove. May the other wing soon come into being! You capture the sounds of grief even from the lips of the disappointed dead.
ReplyDeleteWe enjoy our children' smiles and laugh, not what show these photos...
ReplyDeletevery sad ..and form really underlines the tragedy.
Children are so often caught in the crossfire. It is a tragic situation indeed.
ReplyDeleteIt's so sad, the misery people bestow on each other. You capture that suffering so well in your poem. I guess not all poems need to be of love and happiness, but they must also record the truth of humans. Well done.
ReplyDeleteWhen will this ever end? We are in the 21st. Century. How does this hate between tribes continue in the absence of "Common Morality"?
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I find it very sad that this centuries old conflict still sheds new blood on both sides.
ReplyDeletevery well captured despair.
ReplyDeletethis is my first reading of a nonet, thanks for sharing. this is such a sad write, posing questions only the heart can answer. Have a nice Sunday
ReplyDeletemuch love...
The image, story and poem breaks my heart and gives me a sickening feeling deep within my soul. It is an absolute tragedy that our young children become victims of socio-political agendas they know nothing about.
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing this story, and also thank you for sharing this new poetic form (at least it's new to me.) I will try it sometime.
Your words and pictures speak volume but it seems no one is listening. Will the madness ever end?
ReplyDeleteBeautifully crafted and heartbreaking.
ReplyDeleteIt saddens the heart...but certainly your made a great tribute to the departed,
ReplyDeleteYou've created a beautiful sadness with your words . . . It's a reminder that life is bittersweet.
ReplyDeleteIt is a horror to see such blatant violence and killings. In other areas there are efforts to contain them or even steps taken to resolve them.But sadly it is allowed to escalate in the Middle East where political will to resolve them are nil. Powerful write Sumana!
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Hi Sumana, so sad is what's going on over there. when will they ever find peace and love and joy? even children are being killed...it's just sad. thanks for the informative poem.
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