An Evening Out
Faint pink sky
Is pinned
With a single star
The evening bowl
Is filled
With chirp and twitter
Homeward feet
Are riveted
With weariness
Some are out
On the dirt road
Of stardust
Posted for Susan’s Midweek Motif ~ An Evening Out @ Poets United
I love this! Your opening and closing lines are magical. Just beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI love this! Your opening and closing lines are magical. Just beautiful.
ReplyDeletenice...like metaphor of the filling bowl...and great end as well with dirt road star light...
ReplyDeleteFilling or emptying. If I could be walking on that road, I'd be filling with delight in the stardust. Interesting word "riveted." Everything swirls around and for that, to lift the feet and enter the magic.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful piece!!!
ReplyDeleteThere is nothing like coming home after a tiring night (or a day) out! I feel this, Sumana.
ReplyDeleteThis is really pretty!
ReplyDeleteI felt a special celebration in this that brings life and stars out of a weary day.
ReplyDeleteCharming
Vibrant and picturesque :)
ReplyDeleteHomeward feet
ReplyDeleteAre riveted
With weariness
The feel to be home can be stifled for a while because of tiredness. Rightly being home is where one wants to be! Nicely Sumana!
Hank
the entirety of your poem is all magical. I especially loved this:
ReplyDeletethe evening bowl
is filled with chirp and twitter...
to me it could mean a party of eccentrics chirping and twittering away on poetry while dressed in fairy tale attire...
Just beautiful... good day!
So much life captured in that bowl..and offered to us...like sunshine
ReplyDeleteI love the sky being pin up. Very nice.
ReplyDelete"On the dirt road Of stardust" - a timeless, expression of the simple pleasures in life.
ReplyDeleteI love how with your opening and closing lines you take us from the birth of evening to the beginning of night... smooth.
ReplyDeleteEvening bowl filled with chirp and twitter...
ReplyDeleteHomeward feet riveted with weariness...
Impressive visuals!