Tuesday, 9 September 2014

A Birth

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In suffocating pressure

Heart and soul burn

Gasp for a dot of air, light

And pray a million years

To be released

From the hellish dungeon

Once out

Days of

Planning, Cleaving, Bruting

Begin; days drag on

Till bathing in acid

Is done meticulously

Only then the pallor is gone

A radiant luster peeps

The whole body glows

The diamond smiles

All suffering ends

Without darkness

There is no birth of light

                


Posted for Anthony’s prompt @ dVerse Poetics – Bringing Light To Darkness

28 comments:

  1. cool... the pressure a diamond endures until it sparkles in all its beauty surely can teach us a good lesson... light comes never easy it seems...

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  2. that last line pretty much sums up the entire prompt itself... Stellar write, Sumana :)))

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  3. Hard to fathom at times that diamonds begin as lumps of coal, that pearls begin as a grain of sand, that we begin as one-celled organisms; great take on the prompt' a real gem of a write.

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  4. I think that one has to see the darkness to know the light.. and pure light is a darkness in itself.

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  5. I specially love that last two lines ~ You gave darkness a different perspective in the birthing of the light ~

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  6. Beautiful, without those periods of darkness how would we ever find the light?

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  7. Diamonds out of pressure, nice metaphor

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  8. Oh, this is beautiful Sumana. I love your take on this. Indeed, we need the darkness to appreciate the light, or for light to exist.

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  9. Great take on the prompt and like others have said I love those last two lines.

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  10. I like how you conclude this poem Sumana. It reminded me of the saying, thru suffering do we grow.

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  11. The more i suffer in life the more i appreciate life..and the gift of dark..is certainly the light of light in dark for me 2..:)

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  12. This poem makes me think of the eternalness of the light.

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  13. The pain of birthing the self into light--so well expressed, Sumana.

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  14. From the darkness comes enlightenment...perfect.

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  15. This is wonderful, Sumana. A really unique take on the prompt. So true, diamonds have to go through the ultimate dark before rising to the light. I like your theme & approach.

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  16. I like your darkness to light metaphor. Well done and very creative. http://www.still1.blogspot.com/2014/09/agony-in-congo.html

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  17. Aaiii! Your ending is ambiguous: Are diamonds a soul-less light or a promise that of this time light will come? Very few people actually get the diamonds.

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  18. That ultimate truth!
    "dot of air" is wow :)

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  19. ... and that dot of air bring hope

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  20. Beautifully worded metaphor, Sumana with wise last two lines.

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  21. very interesting. I like the ending...that thought has been lingering in my head as I read the prompt and have begun reading all the responses, yet I have not figured out how to put it into words...and now you have done it for me so perfectly. lovely write.

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  22. I really do agree that to feel the light, we must first feel the pain, to know and appreciate what the light is for. Lovely write.

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  23. True. It is hard to appreciate the light without having known the dark. :-)

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  24. There is truth and wisdom in those last two lines. Reminds me of "'this better to have loved and lost...".

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