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Tuesday, 9 September 2014
A Birth
In suffocating pressure
Heart and soul burn
Gasp for a dot of air, light
And pray a million years
To be released
From the hellish dungeon
Once out
Days of
Planning, Cleaving, Bruting
Begin; days drag on
Till bathing in acid
Is done meticulously
Only then the pallor is gone
A radiant luster peeps
The whole body glows
The diamond smiles
All suffering ends
Without darkness
There is no birth of light
Posted for Anthony’s prompt @
dVerse Poetics – Bringing Light To Darkness
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cool... the pressure a diamond endures until it sparkles in all its beauty surely can teach us a good lesson... light comes never easy it seems...
ReplyDeletethat last line pretty much sums up the entire prompt itself... Stellar write, Sumana :)))
ReplyDeleteHard to fathom at times that diamonds begin as lumps of coal, that pearls begin as a grain of sand, that we begin as one-celled organisms; great take on the prompt' a real gem of a write.
ReplyDeleteI think that one has to see the darkness to know the light.. and pure light is a darkness in itself.
ReplyDeleteI specially love that last two lines ~ You gave darkness a different perspective in the birthing of the light ~
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, without those periods of darkness how would we ever find the light?
ReplyDeleteDiamonds out of pressure, nice metaphor
ReplyDeleteOh, this is beautiful Sumana. I love your take on this. Indeed, we need the darkness to appreciate the light, or for light to exist.
ReplyDeleteGreat take on the prompt and like others have said I love those last two lines.
ReplyDeleteI like how you conclude this poem Sumana. It reminded me of the saying, thru suffering do we grow.
ReplyDelete...let there be light...
ReplyDeleteThe more i suffer in life the more i appreciate life..and the gift of dark..is certainly the light of light in dark for me 2..:)
ReplyDeleteThis poem makes me think of the eternalness of the light.
ReplyDeleteThe pain of birthing the self into light--so well expressed, Sumana.
ReplyDeletebeautiful Sumana:)
ReplyDeleteFrom the darkness comes enlightenment...perfect.
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful, Sumana. A really unique take on the prompt. So true, diamonds have to go through the ultimate dark before rising to the light. I like your theme & approach.
ReplyDeleteI like your darkness to light metaphor. Well done and very creative. http://www.still1.blogspot.com/2014/09/agony-in-congo.html
ReplyDeleteAaiii! Your ending is ambiguous: Are diamonds a soul-less light or a promise that of this time light will come? Very few people actually get the diamonds.
ReplyDeleteThat ultimate truth!
ReplyDelete"dot of air" is wow :)
... and that dot of air bring hope
ReplyDeleteBeautifully worded metaphor, Sumana with wise last two lines.
ReplyDeletevery interesting. I like the ending...that thought has been lingering in my head as I read the prompt and have begun reading all the responses, yet I have not figured out how to put it into words...and now you have done it for me so perfectly. lovely write.
ReplyDeletealways good to escape a hellish dungeon
ReplyDeleteNotes From A Metro Line
I really do agree that to feel the light, we must first feel the pain, to know and appreciate what the light is for. Lovely write.
ReplyDeleteTrue. It is hard to appreciate the light without having known the dark. :-)
ReplyDeleteThere is truth and wisdom in those last two lines. Reminds me of "'this better to have loved and lost...".
ReplyDeleteI like your take, Sumana.
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