Saturday, 29 November 2014

Time

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Eyes were new and so were the bones

Frolicking, chirping without moans

Summer-Spring of life with flowery frill

Universe sang just chill, chill, chill

Autumn’s still glowing with a bright light

Yet sinew’s losing that omnipotent might

Dawn, day and dusk have a strange new feel

Universe is singing chill, chill and chill

A time will come when harvest is done

The mind will long for the hidden sun

The sleepy physique will show time’s weal

Universe will whisper chill, chill, chill

The body and mind will be full of mirth

Awaiting keenly for another birth

 

 

Posted for Bjorn’s hosting Sunday-Mini-ChallengeTime-travel  where we are to write a poem using past, present and future time in the same poem @ Real Toads

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33 comments:

  1. like seasons we too should flow......................

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  2. awaiting another birth... lovely. i love the feeling of peace in flowing..

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  3. The "chill, chill, chill" displays how universe still goes on as a life passes from the spring and summer to an eventual winter. Only a mind at peace and a life lived whole would be full of mirth, waiting for the next birth.
    A wonderful read. :-)
    -HA

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  4. Loved the rhyming structure ... beautiful :-)

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  5. How sensible to see life as that never ending wheel, we fight it of course but my moaning bones are telling the truth; "Chill out old man and make a little room".

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  6. Times will come and go, marked by both deaths and births.

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  7. Sometimes the warmth has to come from within - universe is so cold.

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  8. Universe's song of chill, chill, chill is preparing us for what is ahead....

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  9. The truth wonderfully described.
    I can deal with the body wearing out and giving up the ghost at an old age. When it happens to a person one might deem too young, I find it awfully sad.
    Thank you for visiting at poetryofthenetherworld.blogspot.com

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  10. Great expression of the life cycle. 'Yet sinew’s losing that omnipotent might' - this is something I can definitely relate to, especially when I get up from the couch.

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  11. It is real chilling with the impending winter! Nothing frightening but just physically chilling that is not ghost-like! Great rhyming Sumana!

    Hank

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  12. the seasons swirl one into the next...fluid...and seeming ever faster the older that i get....and perhaps chill has less to do with temperature and more to do with just going with the flow...smiles.

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  13. Loop of the life connected by the omnipotent nature...powerful poem x

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  14. chill, chill, chill! if only.

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  15. Awaiting another birth is such a lovely thought.........

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  16. I like the repeat line between the different sections. A great way to organize the poem without using stanzas.

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  17. The cycles of life so beautifully depicted, Sumana. Beautiful!

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  18. I love the line that you've employed for preposition...it personifies the Universe...I like that! :)

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  19. Universe will whisper chill chill chill...
    Loved it

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  20. What a wonderful circle of life. The repetitions are delicious, too.

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  21. Like the repetitions. Well done.

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  22. Wonderful passage of time through this verse....

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  23. I loved the flow...Words... And the feel it gives.

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  24. loved that repetitions. a "bouncy" feel to the poem. :)

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  25. I like forward to its rebirth ~ I like the refrain of chill, chill, chill ~

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  26. Winter does inspire a look back doesn't it? And we look forward to sunny days.

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  27. A wonderful homage to life, and time and seasons which brought to mind: To every thing there is a season, and a time to every purpose under the heaven: Ecclesiastes 3:1. Beautifully penned, Sumana.

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  28. Hi, hope all is well, lomng time.............have a happy 2015

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