any picture comes to my mind,
i try to give it a body of words,
love to sit on other blooms,
for honey, color, fragrance........
interesting imagery.. stormy days were painted in blue.. that's so true.
I quite liked the form and the images you painted here; especially "limping away my days of clouds of black and blue and shattered dreams".
Exquisite work here...love the depiction of images you have created in your poem...makes me feel like im flying through the clouds!xoxo
Such sadness specially these lines:Stormy days were painted in blueSomeone carried the sun awayHope that thread of light comes back to pierce away the dark clouds~ Well done with the form Sumana ~
Raging weather can really shatter one's dreams....especially when someone carries the sun away and one can only gasp for breath. Hopefully the days will lighten again, but...never in the same way as they were before, I know.
Some days are just like that storm so let them pass
Melted dreams....how terrible this feels when it happens...what a reflective poem
This is very much like a storm of the mind-- clouding over and sadness. Thanks. K.
I can feel the storm working here into a very skillful elegy of sadness.. the envoi that summarizes the aftermath is heartbreaking.. Thank you for grazing the form with such great poetry.
This reads so sad which is usually perfect to an effective execution of either quartina or sestina, IMHO. Well done!- ksm
Sumana, I was so drawn into this poem, those halcyon days, gilded in memory, then someone taking the sun away, leaving the narrator in a time of sorrow and stormy skies. May she hang on, in trust that, one day, if a return to halcyon times cannot be, a measure of peace will be hers again. Blessings to you, my friend. This is a beautiful poem and I love the form, though I cant identify it. I assume it is a response to Bjorn's form. I love the result, though I cant figure out how people are doing it!!!!!
lovely cloud imagery Sumana; have a nice Sundaymuch love...
''No thread of light to weave the dreams''Such sadness and feelings of lost hope, Sumana. Perhaps there is light behind the clouds, to begin new dreams of brightness.Poppy
"Stormy days were painted in blue Someone carried the sun away"sounds of sadness, nice one!
Wonderful images of storms that could mean storms of the mind or relationships or just storms....I particularly loved...'White days saddened into black cloudsRaging weather melted the dreams'Donna@LivingFromHappiness
A melancholic poem, well done with the form ~ hopefully the sun will shine again soon.
we can still have the invisible to hold onto even the clouds have given up our dreams.
Clouds do enter and leave our lives in many ways, don't they. An exquisite extended metaphor, Sumana.
Your images play in my mind and heart like a film with few words--just sound track with the changing clouds from dream to dreamless ... so sad.
So nicely written, Sumana as if this all could be true, a bad dream. My kind of nightmare, awake or sleeping, but impossible in real life for sure.. I liked the taking away of the sun, the wildest and post preposterous. The envoy was perfect as well, the hectameter made it easy to divide in two. Mine was really lopsided, I began my last line with one of the rhyming words...
The melancholy in this is so strong. We all have those days where clouds are more than fluff in the sky. Beautiful capture of the poetic form.
Beauty wrapped in sadness. Wonderful write.
Would you like a cup of tea? A sad poem.
White days saddened into black cloudsRaging weather melted the dreamsThere are bad days that run against us. It can have devastating effects. It can create problems if one is not careful and leave us limping!Hank
Sumana,I hate the idea of dreams all falling away, though on a grey cloud ridden day, as I have here; it is possible to imagine that happening. Seeking more pleasant blue sky and sunny days weathers, soon!!A new and different form of composing your words!!Eileen
Oh, a little sad here, Sumana. Especially if 'Someone carried the sun away'. That's a really great line though :) I love the imagery you've created as well. Great job, Sumana :)
This is beautiful Sumana. We can all relate to the sadness of dreams extinguished by clouds. It's so amazing to me, that you can write something so lovely while adhering to the rules of a form. I must, must be brave enough to try that...someday.
seen through a tear before the smile... :-)ZQ
Oh Sumana its a song and Blues at that. I smiled because I was about to write a stormy poem. You really do have a way of making things come alive!!!
A very beautiful poem.
the visuals in this poetry are outstanding! you really pull the reader into the atmosphere with your words. excellent.
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