Wednesday, 18 September 2013

 For : Haiku Heights
         Day 18 Sept.
Prompt : Chirp
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For : Poetry Jam
Prompt : Battle

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CHIRP
Trees jingling faint light
Sleepy eyes combat the chirps
Blood-red fire ball bursts

Blood-red fire ball bursts
Sleepy eyes combat for life
Chirps stop for ever
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22 comments:

  1. Panchali18 September 2013 at 07:59

    wow..powerful write, sumana! well done...

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  2. Brian Miller18 September 2013 at 08:11

    interesting way to use chirps...the first part made me think of being woke by the birds...like i slept late...smiles...the second turns all that on its head...smiles.

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    1. Sumana Roy18 September 2013 at 10:25

      thanks Brian for sharing your thoughts..... :)

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  3. Anonymous18 September 2013 at 08:43

    what a powerful set, Sumana.

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  4. Mary18 September 2013 at 09:23

    The last line is breath-taking.

    So nice to see you at Poetry Jam!

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    1. Sumana Roy18 September 2013 at 10:27


      Thanks Mary.....the prompt @ PJ was great...

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  5. Nanka18 September 2013 at 09:30

    Sad :( and so it ends all!!

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    1. Sumana Roy18 September 2013 at 11:11


      thanks Nanka........yeah helpless victims of war...

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  6. Peggy18 September 2013 at 12:18

    I like short verse and the chance it gives us to focus on the words. I get more from this each time I read it. Thanks for posting!!

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    1. Sumana Roy18 September 2013 at 22:26


      thank you Peggy for the visit and encouraging words.... :)

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  7. Laurie Kolp18 September 2013 at 13:54

    Oh, wow... what an ending. Powerful.

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  8. Sherry Blue Sky18 September 2013 at 17:20

    I dont think a poem ever hit me in the heart quite like this one. Its brevity, and the image of the chirpy little bird just slams the message home. I think it is possible humankind is in a state of psychosis. FANTASTIC write!

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    1. Sumana Roy18 September 2013 at 22:29

      Thank you Sherry for the warm words of appreciation and encouragement...

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  9. Amrit Sinha18 September 2013 at 22:07

    This is beautiful ... powerful and touching !!!

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    1. Sumana Roy18 September 2013 at 22:31


      thanks Amrit for the visit and your nice words..

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  10. Lady In Read18 September 2013 at 22:32

    really wonderful words - the sadness speaks to anyone who reads them..

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  11. Sumana Roy18 September 2013 at 23:30


    thanks for the visit and your words...

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  12. Jennifer Wagner19 September 2013 at 10:06

    aww...the chirping of birds is lovely to my ears and your close hit me in my heart.

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  13. Sumana Roy19 September 2013 at 19:47


    thanks for the visit and your words of appreciation...

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