Wednesday, 18 September 2013

 For : Haiku Heights
         Day 18 Sept.
Prompt : Chirp
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For : Poetry Jam
Prompt : Battle

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CHIRP
Trees jingling faint light
Sleepy eyes combat the chirps
Blood-red fire ball bursts

Blood-red fire ball bursts
Sleepy eyes combat for life
Chirps stop for ever

22 comments:

  1. wow..powerful write, sumana! well done...

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  2. interesting way to use chirps...the first part made me think of being woke by the birds...like i slept late...smiles...the second turns all that on its head...smiles.

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    1. thanks Brian for sharing your thoughts..... :)

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  3. The last line is breath-taking.

    So nice to see you at Poetry Jam!

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    1. Thanks Mary.....the prompt @ PJ was great...

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  4. Sad :( and so it ends all!!

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    1. thanks Nanka........yeah helpless victims of war...

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  5. I like short verse and the chance it gives us to focus on the words. I get more from this each time I read it. Thanks for posting!!

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    1. thank you Peggy for the visit and encouraging words.... :)

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  6. Oh, wow... what an ending. Powerful.

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  7. I dont think a poem ever hit me in the heart quite like this one. Its brevity, and the image of the chirpy little bird just slams the message home. I think it is possible humankind is in a state of psychosis. FANTASTIC write!

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    1. Thank you Sherry for the warm words of appreciation and encouragement...

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  8. This is beautiful ... powerful and touching !!!

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    1. thanks Amrit for the visit and your nice words..

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  9. really wonderful words - the sadness speaks to anyone who reads them..

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  10. thanks for the visit and your words...

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  11. aww...the chirping of birds is lovely to my ears and your close hit me in my heart.

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  12. thanks for the visit and your words of appreciation...

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