Sunday, 10 November 2013




The Night Witnesses

 
        
 courtesy : Forest Terminal by Mike Worrall

A dilapidated station 
Is half awake
A maze of trees Lies in wait
A solitary soul
Draped in black
Lost in thought of remote past
Frozen lake
Nowhere to be seen
Unending rail tracks
Vanish into mists
All promises kept and all miles trodden
Lovely, deep woods must be paid heed to then
Tell tale clock nods, knows what will happen

Written for Sunday Challenge featuring Mike Worrall @ Real Toads & shared with Poetry Pantry @ Poets United


 

25 comments:

  1. you have def laid the scene out there...with a lot of anticipation and potential...

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  2. Eek...I don't know what will happen .... Neat.

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    1. thanks Susan...this painting reminded me of Frost's 'lovely, dark and deep' woods ......

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  3. Loved the imagery you invoked. You captured with your eloquent words what lie in the picture perfectly. Your words drew me in and made me think. Loved it.

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  4. The threat the eeriness of what will happen to that wood captures me

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  5. And I hope it will be what she has wished and hoped for ~ Specially like that maze of trees waiting for her ~ Good one Sumana ~

    Thanks for linking up with Real Toads Sunday Challenge ~

    Happy weekend ~

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  6. You have really written to atmosphere well, Sumana. And yes, sometimes I think the clock sees and knows all.

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  7. you left me wondering what will happen..well done ... great poem...

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  8. you've created so much atmosphere with every line. well done!

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  9. I like the way you personified the train station in the opening lines. That is really effective writing.

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  10. An almost eerie atmosphere created... I liked how you ended it. Interesting write. :-)
    -HA

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  11. Very atmospheric poem! I too would like to know what will happen.

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  12. So mysterious & intriguing. What will happen? I hope it's something good! :)

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  13. slightly chilling, very interesting. keeps the reader wanting for more. :)

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  14. I love those short choppy lines that bring speed to the reading and the closing line with the nodding knowing all clock is really intriguing!

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  15. A mystery that only the clock can answer...love this short, dark piece

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  16. Mysterious and compelling. I want to be a fly on the wall and see what happens next!

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  17. It has a mist or mystery and some past connection, But lovely poem.

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  18. Your words sound like a spell! Cool!

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  19. Ah, the clock knows. This sounds like the scene is set for something surreal. I wonder what?

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  20. Haunting... beautifully haunting at that :) Well woven spell, Sumana.

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  21. Hauntingly draws your reader into the mystery you have created. Really well done,

    Elizabeth

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  22. …telltale clock. Time - it can wait - finds out all things, doesn't it?

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  23. this is quite intriguing! a wonderful take on the image.

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  24. I love the way this piece relates to the picture. Very nice.

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