Sunday, 10 November 2013




The Night Witnesses

 
        
 courtesy : Forest Terminal by Mike Worrall

A dilapidated station 
Is half awake
A maze of trees Lies in wait
A solitary soul
Draped in black
Lost in thought of remote past
Frozen lake
Nowhere to be seen
Unending rail tracks
Vanish into mists
All promises kept and all miles trodden
Lovely, deep woods must be paid heed to then
Tell tale clock nods, knows what will happen

Written for Sunday Challenge featuring Mike Worrall @ Real Toads & shared with Poetry Pantry @ Poets United


 
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24 comments:

  1. Brian Miller10 November 2013 at 04:07

    you have def laid the scene out there...with a lot of anticipation and potential...

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  2. Susan10 November 2013 at 04:15

    Eek...I don't know what will happen .... Neat.

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    1. Sumana Roy10 November 2013 at 10:07

      thanks Susan...this painting reminded me of Frost's 'lovely, dark and deep' woods ......

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  3. Unknown10 November 2013 at 04:58

    Loved the imagery you invoked. You captured with your eloquent words what lie in the picture perfectly. Your words drew me in and made me think. Loved it.

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  4. brudberg10 November 2013 at 05:00

    The threat the eeriness of what will happen to that wood captures me

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  5. Scarlet10 November 2013 at 05:01

    And I hope it will be what she has wished and hoped for ~ Specially like that maze of trees waiting for her ~ Good one Sumana ~

    Thanks for linking up with Real Toads Sunday Challenge ~

    Happy weekend ~

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  6. Mary10 November 2013 at 05:10

    You have really written to atmosphere well, Sumana. And yes, sometimes I think the clock sees and knows all.

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  7. revelations10 November 2013 at 08:40

    you left me wondering what will happen..well done ... great poem...

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  8. Geraldine 10 November 2013 at 09:31

    you've created so much atmosphere with every line. well done!

    www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com

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  9. Kerry O'Connor10 November 2013 at 10:12

    I like the way you personified the train station in the opening lines. That is really effective writing.

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  10. Anonymous10 November 2013 at 11:27

    An almost eerie atmosphere created... I liked how you ended it. Interesting write. :-)
    -HA

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  11. Gabriella10 November 2013 at 12:02

    Very atmospheric poem! I too would like to know what will happen.

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  12. dsnake110 November 2013 at 14:45

    slightly chilling, very interesting. keeps the reader wanting for more. :)

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  13. Hannah10 November 2013 at 17:29

    I love those short choppy lines that bring speed to the reading and the closing line with the nodding knowing all clock is really intriguing!

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  14. Susie Clevenger10 November 2013 at 18:49

    A mystery that only the clock can answer...love this short, dark piece

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  15. TALON10 November 2013 at 19:28

    Mysterious and compelling. I want to be a fly on the wall and see what happens next!

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  16. Vandana Sharma10 November 2013 at 20:15

    It has a mist or mystery and some past connection, But lovely poem.

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  17. humbird10 November 2013 at 20:41

    Your words sound like a spell! Cool!

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  18. Other Mary11 November 2013 at 05:30

    Ah, the clock knows. This sounds like the scene is set for something surreal. I wonder what?

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  19. Vinay Leo R.11 November 2013 at 11:00

    Haunting... beautifully haunting at that :) Well woven spell, Sumana.

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  20. Anonymous11 November 2013 at 17:25

    Hauntingly draws your reader into the mystery you have created. Really well done,

    Elizabeth

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  21. Margaret11 November 2013 at 20:15

    …telltale clock. Time - it can wait - finds out all things, doesn't it?

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  22. Anonymous12 November 2013 at 00:44

    this is quite intriguing! a wonderful take on the image.

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  23. aspiritofsimplicity14 November 2013 at 02:34

    I love the way this piece relates to the picture. Very nice.

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