Thursday, 12 June 2014

AN EVENING IN A MONASTERY



Each water droplet of the saffron river

Sing renunciation

While the lovers nibble grass with their

Cotton ball stuffed ears

The ochre robed man sprinkles on his shaven head

The blissful placidity from the flow

The trees with their black foliages

Sing in bird voice

An all mighty little star fake smiles at

The weary sun

Tear drops of violet daylight mingle with the water

Vespers from the monastery stir my soul

And quietly flows the Himalayas

In the mind of his daughter Ganga*

               

 

*In the Hindu mythology the Ganga (the Ganges) is Himalayas’ daughter

 

 

 

Written for  Meeting the Bar: Critique and Craft @ d’Verse

18 comments:

  1. Saffron is such a beautiful color; the imagery of the river is lovely...
    The black foliages on trees as well... smiles

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  2. Tear drop of violet day light..very nice image there sumana...:)

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  3. Oh I love teardrop of a violet day mingling with water...very nice indeed.

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  4. I like the imagery of saffron waters and violet daylight mingling with the water ~ There's tranquility there ~

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  5. The solace of the soft colors contrasts so much to those black trees I think...

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  6. What a beautiful flow this poem has, Sumana.

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  7. i like how you touch each sense.....the vespers, mixed with the violet daylight in the water....whole lot of imagery to take in with this one....

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  8. Ah! Ganga..........................her one touch makes us pious!

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  9. i love the peacefulness in this...and oh the ganges being himalayas daughter.... what a wonderful thought and image

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  10. Sweet yet profound, & a nice take on the dVerse prompt. It transported me to your word for a time; thanks.

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  11. Very lovely imagery...I can see the monk , "sprinkles on his shaven head". Love the flowing Himalayas.......

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  12. Quite a beautiful poem you conjured up here...perhaps it was the mood you were in at the time...mystical, mythical, yet, solemn and serene in nature..lovely actually

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  13. yes, the river would be the daughter of the mountains - beautiful and pure at the source.

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  14. what a tranquil, vivid moment. inspiring and beautiful. also enjoy the little tidbit towards the end, i learned something new!

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  15. This is a beautifully colourful piece, with a magical quality that I really enjoyed.

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