Thursday, 25 June 2015
Time Travel
Anxious faces of loved ones
See tears rolling down her cheeks
While her eyes are still closed
Though she can see
The green fields of yore
And she is playing there as a child
She hears the loving voices
Of her dear ones who are no more
She sees her as a bride
While the grooms face is vague
He left her long ago
When he breathed his last
She sees scenes after scenes
Taken from her life
Though her eyes remain closed
And tears stream down her cheeks
Her bosom still heaves slowly
Then becomes still
The loved ones bend over
Whispers fill the air
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very powerful... seeing all those who are now gone and the groom's face being vague... so sad.
ReplyDeleteThere are times when the veil def grows thin, and we can see those that have gone on. To be the one still here, can be tough as well - especially if it is a spouse that precedes you
ReplyDeleteGreat images here for your flashback to her youth and life...something one does at times like this. You had me at the beginning with the title!
ReplyDeleteThis is a beautiful vision of death, Sumana. The loved ones are there awaiting her arrival.
ReplyDeleteA very beautiful poem of old memories.
ReplyDeleteYour words convey the feeling that death does not have to be hard for the one leaving this world as she gently remembers the past. There is something very comforting about the tone of your poem, Sumana.
ReplyDeletei wonder if it is like this when we breathe those last breaths - that we remember our life and people that meant much to us
ReplyDeleteThis is such a powerful piece! Well penned :)
ReplyDeleteThere is no moment quite like this for flashbacks of what our lives have been a very powerful write.
ReplyDeleteOh.. the last moments of life ..are filled with the love we give.. to spend a life in loving.. is to fill every moment.. with the last moment of Love..:)
ReplyDeleteWe all hope our last moments will be peaceful, the way you've portrayed them. Just before a friend's husband died, he spoke these comforting words: "Don't worry. It's easy." Similar to the serenity your woman experiences.
ReplyDeleteShe seems to be at peace...at last. Poignant moments at the end of life here.
ReplyDeleteThe ending is poignant and filled with much hope ~ But there's hope in the waiting to be reunited for the loved ones who have long gone ~
ReplyDeleteThey do say that your life flashes before your eyes in those final moments - glad to see it was mostly pleasant memories for the woman in your poem.
ReplyDeleteThe reminds me of lines in Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock: till human voices wake us and we drown. I sat by my grandmother as she died and witnessed that last breath. And yes, the veil between us moves and we can briefly see. I like to think when we die, we all see these peaceful and happy visions of our lives.
ReplyDeleteA lovely cascade of evocative images of one woman's life passages. Beautifully sketched. Poignant and yet ... peaceful and calming.
ReplyDeleteDeja Vous ... poignant
ReplyDeleteSuch sorrowful moments seem suspended in time..perhaps necessarily so? Despite the pain maybe it is a way remembrance and a window into the green fields that i hope everybody we lose gets once again to return to - a beautiful poem Sumana..tender and strong
ReplyDeleteOh the power of those memories
ReplyDeleteHow beautifully you capture the thoughts of the dying woman as her life flashes before her.
ReplyDeleteOh, this is very touching!
ReplyDeleteThis made me remember the final episode of the series "Six Feet Under". The last remaining character is waiting for her final moment - her loved ones are all around her.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully touching write, Sumana
Her bosom still heaves slowly
ReplyDeleteThen becomes still
Dying pleasantly and with dignity is what one hopes for! The grace with what one leaves reflects how sincere and kind a life it was! Great lines Sumana!
Hank
A short epic that turns each reader into a film director, filling up her past story.
ReplyDeleteEven though set in India, this poem could also be set in Greece, or Cyprus. A very complete write, at once tender, comforting, very sad...
Touching and quite surreal.
ReplyDeletetouching.. so much emotions.
ReplyDeleteThere are many memories, often painful, in a long life.
ReplyDeleteOh, to be called back to happy childhood and the loving voices of those who have gone before us.....if death would only be so sweet..you have painted this beautifully.
ReplyDeleteThey say our life streams before us right before death. Nice how you captured these flashbacks as the person is surrounded by loved ones. You painted a very tender scene Sumana.
ReplyDeletea comforting poem
ReplyDeletethanks for dropping in at my Sunday Lime today
much love...
You brought tears to my eyes...
ReplyDeleteThis is very sensitive and beautiful.
ReplyDeleteZQ
I have seen this, in those who are dying, Sumana, how their last thoughts are with those old memories. I echo Mary, those loved ones are waiting for her arrival. I believe this. So beautifully written, as always.
ReplyDeleteSumana I was so touched by this beautiful poem of a loved one breathing her last with loved ones and precious memories...
ReplyDeleteDonna@LivingFromHappiness
Your words are filled with so much emotion. This is beautifully written, Sumana.
ReplyDeleteThis terrified me. Yes, family and friends were all around at the end. But someone still died, and for that one person, the world completely disappears.
ReplyDeleteA touching scene of good bye.
ReplyDeleteA sad, yet compelling piece.
ReplyDeleteSumana,
ReplyDeleteThis poem reminds me of some sad dreams I have had; so frightened by the happenings taking place, that I have wakened up crying. They usually do involve a loss of family or love..Very powerfully emotional Sumana.
Eileen
Vivid description of the end of one life...
ReplyDeleteNo Idea (Longer Poem)
O, yes, time compressing more and more, at the end one can rewind the whole life for short minutes...emotional write...
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