Thursday 30 July 2015

A Word That Rose



A Word that Rose—

Though mild - It seemed

Grew - Twisted Twirled and Cold

Became a Thorn that shot a heart

Beyond the Realm of Right—

A Word that Iced a fountain-smile

Like souls in limbo Stays

In pain – regretful sighs

No Earth – nor – Hell – neither Heaven

 

I used Dickinson’s poem A WindThat Rose for my inspiration

                                                         


Posted for MTB dVerse where we are writing in the style of Emily Dickinson

14 comments:

  1. Of all the poems I've read to this prompt, this feels to me the most true to the original. Not just the external aspects of it - the capitalisation, the dashes, the staccato phrases - those are easy enough to imitate. But you have really nailed that sense of wondering, of fear and awe of what lies ahead, that yearning...

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  2. Words have a lot of power. Sometimes a single word will set life ablaze, and others will snuff it right out.

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  3. I admire the response Sumana specially the use of dashes & that ending killer line with: No Earth – nor – Hell – neither Heaven

    You have captured her vague yet sharp impossibility ~

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  4. Loved your take on this prompt :)
    Beautifully penned!

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  5. This is brilliant, Sumana. You employed her "poetic tools" so well and created such a melancholic mood, which is something Dickinson would applaud, as do I.

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  6. Wow. You truly did channel Emily's style on this. Most excellent work.

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  7. You have captured a lot of the Dickinson style in your poem, Sumana. The dashes, the capitalizations. Quite a painful subject though, which is also something that Dickinson might have felt. I think she was a very lonely person!

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  8. Sadly we sometimes utter that word, even if only to regret it. The ending is particularly powerful.

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  9. Phew... that was energetic and powerful!

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  10. Limbo soul.. unmistakable
    eyes of human..
    Emily's
    face..
    A best
    poetic
    expression..
    for me..
    sees
    often..
    humanity
    repressing
    more than
    oppressing
    NOW
    in aisles of Emily
    Super Wal-marts..
    in eyes
    of Purgatory
    Stores..:)

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  11. Fascinating -- it sounds like it hurt

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  12. A very contemplative piece. "In pain – regretful sighs" - so true.

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  13. Words are very powerful... can grow to be painful when they're twisted..

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