Saturday, 1 August 2015

Martyr



“Who told you to touch my things?

There should be limits to trespasses

Uh oh don’t try to serenade

You are no bird of paradise

I hate that martyred look of yours

Could you please get lost?”

Her stony feet

Can’t walk out of this hell

Of every second of her life

A sigh escapes

 

Posted for APED Prompt-63 where the prompt word is Martyr suggested by Usha Menon

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15 comments:

  1. Unknown1 August 2015 at 22:08

    Sumana, this a very lovely take of the prompt.

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  2. Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost 2 August 2015 at 00:39

    It makes me think of the sort of person who is terribly invasive and acts as if martyred when called on their behavior. I enjoyed the poem very much.
    http://poetryofthenetherworld.blogspot.com/2015/08/beautiful-boy.html

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  3. Kerry O'Connor2 August 2015 at 01:05

    The words 'trespass' and 'martyr' go very well together.

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  4. Rosemary Nissen-Wade2 August 2015 at 01:25

    As ad and all too common story.

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  5. Grace2 August 2015 at 04:00

    Too sad that her stony feet can't walk out of the hellish situation ~ Nice weaving of both prompts ~

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  6. Outlawyer2 August 2015 at 04:04

    Ah. This is a vivid exchange-- I imagine teen and parent or wife and husband-- well done. K.

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  7. magiceye2 August 2015 at 04:22

    Beautifully woven

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  8. Sanaa Rizvi2 August 2015 at 05:07

    Loved the closing line.. such a melancholic feel to this poem.. a mixture of resentment and longing.

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  9. Mary2 August 2015 at 05:23

    I do hope she finds the strength to 'walk out of this hell.'

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  10. Lolamouse2 August 2015 at 07:46

    Reminds me of the interaction between a teen and an overprotective mother. Well written!

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  11. Magaly Guerrero2 August 2015 at 09:27

    So much tension... rage... and apprehension...

    May she find the means to walk away, and she set boundaries no one can trespass easily.

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  12. grapeling2 August 2015 at 09:59

    the bitter walk of stone underfoot... ~

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  13. Other Mary2 August 2015 at 10:51

    It truly is a terrible situation to have your things and privacy violated and not be able to escape or rectify the situation.

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  14. ZQ2 August 2015 at 14:43

    Yikes! :-)
    ZQ

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  15. Susie Clevenger3 August 2015 at 21:40

    I hope she can find her way out of hell. Strong piece!

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