Poetry for/about birds...they provide much to write about. You have it exactly right, in every line, how the crows behave. Then with the last line you put it all together..what a precarious life they lead, the dangers they face.
A gathering of crows IS called a "murder," after all... ;) You have gracefully echoed WCW's "Wheelbarrow" cadence with this, right down to the use of prepositional phrase, which I enjoyed very much.
Terrific imagery, & fine use of the form; some dark thoughts metaphorically, but keeps us reading. I always like crows as subjects for poetics. They can mimic speech, have had them talk to me, which can be unnerving.
Poetry for/about birds...they provide much to write about. You have it exactly right, in every line, how the crows behave. Then with the last line you put it all together..what a precarious life they lead, the dangers they face.
ReplyDelete....ends very darkly...Can clearly see this in my minds' eye, without the photo. And that is the mark of imagism....well done.
ReplyDeleteTough life
ReplyDeleteI have to say murder, though I shouldn't use a pun like this for a serious poem.. love the dark tone.
ReplyDeleteOh, this is sad really. I hate to think of such a painful death, even if it IS a crow.
ReplyDeleteA gathering of crows IS called a "murder," after all... ;)
ReplyDeleteYou have gracefully echoed WCW's "Wheelbarrow" cadence with this, right down to the use of prepositional phrase, which I enjoyed very much.
Hundreds of black crows in mourning--an ominous sight, indeed. Well done.
ReplyDeleteTerrific imagery, & fine use of the form; some dark thoughts metaphorically, but keeps us reading. I always like crows as subjects for poetics. They can mimic speech, have had them talk to me, which can be unnerving.
ReplyDeleteEerie but dignified as they pay their respect to their fallen friend.
ReplyDeleteStark reality painted in this one, Sumana. Life, all life, is so fragile.
ReplyDeleteThis really captures the images of the crows and suggests a kind of mourning and fellowship. Beutifully crafted.
ReplyDeleteWonderfully captured, my friend.
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ReplyDeletehumans..
road
play
prey
road kill
spells
hU
man
dooms...