Thursday 27 February 2014



TWO TANKAS ON SUCCESS



In each birth and death
Nature scripts Her success tale
I take cue from Her
Rivers dance to death in sea
Downward rushes blooming tree

Each deed done by Man
Is a link of success chain
I take cue from Him
Space shuttle Columbia
Ignites the mind forever

Posted for Susan's Midweek Motif : Success @ Poets United 

13 comments:

  1. I love your original take on success in both of these, the way you have tied them together, and the beautiful closing lines of each.

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  2. "rivers dance to death in sea" Damn, I love the mental picture you just gave me! Nice poem! :)

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  3. oh dang....each of these has pop...the second a bit of shock, because it surely did...i think i like the first best though....very cool

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  4. These are the BEST poems, separately and together! Amazing lines/images from the very first "In each birth and death / Nature scripts Her success tale" to every way you illustrate. Taking "cue from Him" and the horror of the space shuttle ... O! And I love the theatre of it all--script and cue, dance and deed. Take a bow, Sumana Roy!

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  5. "Rivers dance to death in sea"

    Stunning lines !! fell in love with the poem..

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  6. I like the first one. Nature determines success or not.

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  7. Beautiful entwining of success to both, Sumana! Yes, success can be marred by tragedy too! Great write!

    Hank

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  8. I love the rhythm and magic in the first piece..nicely contrasted with the sense of work and human effort in the second

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  9. I specially like the first one:

    In each birth and death
    Nature scripts Her success tale

    Lovely work ~

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  10. These tankas are so thoughtful. "Rivers dance to death in sea" I think, is one of those lines of poetry that comes to mind again and again . . . lovely.

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  11. I love your interpretation of success. Nature indeed succeeds (she's got the perfect formula for living) and man's deeds are links in their chains of success. I also like to think that since we are all connected that we are also part of Nature's and Man's success. Wow both were great writes Sumana.

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  12. Oh, I really like the idea of a success chain. I think we can find what we search for in life. It is better to find a 'success chain' than a 'failure chain' I think. Enjoyed your thoughts.

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