RHYTHM
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| courtesy : google image |
Rivulets stream from pores
Raging sun
Bursts
2
Leaves burst hues to show off
Pride before
Fall
3
Snowfall will invoke Sleep
Migration
Starts
4
The Earth starts and wakes up
Butterflies
Stream
Posted @ d’Verse Poets Pub
These are lovely, Sumana. That second one, especially, is so clever with its play on words.
ReplyDeleteoh nice.. i like how you take us through all four seasons with your tilus'es... i love the streaming butterflies image esp.
ReplyDeleteLovely 4-season slides of the year, all in action.
ReplyDeletei like that last one...its got a cool assumed image of the butterflies bursting forth as the world awakes...
ReplyDeleteThe second one contains so much wisdom. That works well with me
ReplyDeleteWriting one tilus per season was a great idea! I like the spring one best, I think.
ReplyDeleteFour seasons on one day - what a clever construct. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI like the use of seasons specially the last one as its spring from where we are ~ Good response Sumana ~
ReplyDeleteThe seasons color brightly and spring speaks beautifully.
ReplyDeleteI like this poem a lot. :)
Oh, I like each of yours, Sumana. You have taken control of the form. I like #2 very much... Yes, pride before the fall.
ReplyDeletelove the incorporation of the last word into the next stanzas, excellent progression of seasons. well done
ReplyDeletei like your imagery and the rhythm of the seasons!
ReplyDeleteconsistent theme and beautiful..
ReplyDeleteExcellent use of the form to explore the seasons. Nice read!
ReplyDeleteAll the emotions and activities associated with seasons expressed beautifully.
ReplyDeleteI love this seasonal progression, and the fact that you leave us with the optimism and new beginning of Spring.
ReplyDeleteLove the visual evocations!
ReplyDeleteLoved them all....superb.
ReplyDeletelike the chain reaction
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sweet
Very beautiful transition of seasons using the tilus form. thank you for these lovely offering. It falls naturally with your words. I enjoyed it. Thank you. Smiles.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy how in #3 and #4, your second lines were just one word. Gave the second lines almost as much "punch" as the final. Also really enjoyed how you brought us through the seasons, and how each leads to the next, and even the last links back to the first. Full circle!
ReplyDeleteloved your repeat of words from one to the next - beautifully done! K
ReplyDeleteBeautiful seasonal depiction with tilus, smiles. Well crafted :)
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful - the closing word/line of each stanza carefully chosen to evoke and represent each season.
ReplyDeleteThis is fluid and beautiful, with dream like qualities! Lovely~
ReplyDeleteBeautiful way of representing seasons..Sumana
ReplyDeleteThank you for your visit at my site. Happy to come back and read through your poems of season.
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