Thursday 15 May 2014

RHYTHM

courtesy : google image

Rivulets stream from pores
Raging sun
Bursts
2
Leaves burst hues to show off
Pride before
Fall
3
Snowfall will invoke Sleep
Migration
Starts
4
The Earth starts and wakes up
Butterflies
Stream
Posted @ d’Verse Poets Pub 

27 comments:

  1. These are lovely, Sumana. That second one, especially, is so clever with its play on words.

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  2. oh nice.. i like how you take us through all four seasons with your tilus'es... i love the streaming butterflies image esp.

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  3. Lovely 4-season slides of the year, all in action.

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  4. i like that last one...its got a cool assumed image of the butterflies bursting forth as the world awakes...

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  5. The second one contains so much wisdom. That works well with me

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  6. Writing one tilus per season was a great idea! I like the spring one best, I think.

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  7. Four seasons on one day - what a clever construct. Well done!

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  8. I like the use of seasons specially the last one as its spring from where we are ~ Good response Sumana ~

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  9. The seasons color brightly and spring speaks beautifully.

    I like this poem a lot. :)

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  10. Oh, I like each of yours, Sumana. You have taken control of the form. I like #2 very much... Yes, pride before the fall.

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  11. love the incorporation of the last word into the next stanzas, excellent progression of seasons. well done

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  12. i like your imagery and the rhythm of the seasons!

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  13. consistent theme and beautiful..

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  14. Excellent use of the form to explore the seasons. Nice read!

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  15. All the emotions and activities associated with seasons expressed beautifully.

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  16. I love this seasonal progression, and the fact that you leave us with the optimism and new beginning of Spring.

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  17. Love the visual evocations!

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  18. Loved them all....superb.

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  19. like the chain reaction
    poems linked
    sweet

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  20. Very beautiful transition of seasons using the tilus form. thank you for these lovely offering. It falls naturally with your words. I enjoyed it. Thank you. Smiles.

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  21. I really enjoy how in #3 and #4, your second lines were just one word. Gave the second lines almost as much "punch" as the final. Also really enjoyed how you brought us through the seasons, and how each leads to the next, and even the last links back to the first. Full circle!

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  22. loved your repeat of words from one to the next - beautifully done! K

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  23. Beautiful seasonal depiction with tilus, smiles. Well crafted :)

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  24. This is wonderful - the closing word/line of each stanza carefully chosen to evoke and represent each season.

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  25. This is fluid and beautiful, with dream like qualities! Lovely~

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  26. Beautiful way of representing seasons..Sumana

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  27. Thank you for your visit at my site. Happy to come back and read through your poems of season.

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