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Tuesday, 18 November 2014
Identity
If you ask me who I am
I’d say a rivulet perhaps
Originated from love’s paradise
Flowing all life
Discovering surprising bends
Towards an unknown infinity
With the dream
Of giving up this identity
To become one with it
I have sung
Danced
Mingled with many a stream
Our kinds varied
Nevertheless we grew
Together we made this journey smooth
Over jagged rocks
I have moaned
Even have frozen
Suffered separation
When parts of me
Branched out
At different times
Taking new course
But the flow is not without joy
I’ve loved this life
In this long pilgrimage
I have seen the sunrise
The moonlit silver streams
And also a Pole Star
My wavy notes dream
Of never losing the way
Into
some dreary deserts
Rather as the time will draw near
Let the dark sky twinkle
With the hope
Of touching the Infinite One
Posted for Brian’s prompt
Identity @ Poetry Jam
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smiles...what a cool analogy/metaphor...the rivulet in the stream...the long pilgrimage together...and it is a beautiful thing too the devotion to that direction...
ReplyDeleteI like the way you have described your life journey, Sumana....flowing toward an unknown infinity, branching out at different times....and always there is hope. Nice.
ReplyDeleteI love the feeling of a life well-lived, despite some inevitable hardships, as well as the idea of a connection with the divine. "I have seen the sunrise ? The moonlit silver streams ? And also a Pole Star' - great and beautiful use of the celestial bodies!
ReplyDeleteSelf as a stream or river is a good metaphor for life I think. And we do wind so many directions and places always heading for infinity. Your poem made me think about the infinity we flow towards. Food for thought for me.
ReplyDeleteWordless... Brilliantly expressed...
ReplyDeleteLoved these lines :
"Let the dark sky twinkle
With the hope"
Hope - The key to life!
Brilliant! So vibrant and joyful!!
ReplyDeletea lovely ode to self, i'm there with you in the flock Sumana
ReplyDeletehave a nice Wednesday
much love...
A lyrical poem of life flowing through our veins each one of us connected to the other.
ReplyDeletemagical words that sing like a psalm of knowledge, this is a real emotional, image filled journey.
ReplyDeleteSumana,
ReplyDeleteA wonderfully painted image of a life journey, with its ups and downs, through your poetic words. The natural way, via the elements of life...
Eileen
My Hope is built on nothing less. Lovely words, Sumana!
ReplyDeleteSuperb. Wonderfully worded, Sumana.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful lines...what better way than to have a flowing life!
ReplyDeleteYou've captured life's journey well.
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful poem this is! I especially love how it builds to its closing, from "I’ve loved this life
ReplyDeleteIn this long pilgrimage
I have seen the sunrise
The moonlit silver streams
And also a Pole Star
My wavy notes dream
Of never losing the way."
This is an inspired write, Sumana. I love the way you define who you are by integrating little touchstones of physical surroundings you have passed through with a dreamy, transcendent narrative. Really exquisite.
ReplyDeletebrilliant composition, giving a message of positiveness necessary in today's life
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I think this has become one of my favorite poems by you. I love the words you've chosen to describe your journey.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written, I could almost imagine your life. Just loved it, Sumana!
ReplyDeleteI like your extended metaphor, Sumana and the lovely word pictures you have included in this poem. I enjoyed reading it.
ReplyDeleteWow....this is so beautiful...!!!
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