Tuesday 18 November 2014

Identity

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If you ask me who I am

I’d say a rivulet perhaps

Originated from love’s paradise

Flowing all life

Discovering surprising bends

Towards an unknown infinity

With the dream

Of giving up this identity

To become one with it

I have sung

Danced

Mingled with many a stream

Our kinds varied

Nevertheless we grew

Together we made this journey smooth

Over jagged rocks

I have moaned

Even have frozen

Suffered separation

When parts of me

Branched out

At different times

Taking new course

But the flow is not without joy

I’ve loved this life

In this long pilgrimage

I have seen the sunrise

The moonlit silver streams

And also a Pole Star

My wavy notes dream

Of never losing the way

 Into some dreary deserts

Rather as the time will draw near

Let the dark sky twinkle

With the hope

Of touching the Infinite One

 


Posted for Brian’s prompt Identity @ Poetry Jam

21 comments:

  1. smiles...what a cool analogy/metaphor...the rivulet in the stream...the long pilgrimage together...and it is a beautiful thing too the devotion to that direction...

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  2. I like the way you have described your life journey, Sumana....flowing toward an unknown infinity, branching out at different times....and always there is hope. Nice.

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  3. I love the feeling of a life well-lived, despite some inevitable hardships, as well as the idea of a connection with the divine. "I have seen the sunrise ? The moonlit silver streams ? And also a Pole Star' - great and beautiful use of the celestial bodies!

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  4. Self as a stream or river is a good metaphor for life I think. And we do wind so many directions and places always heading for infinity. Your poem made me think about the infinity we flow towards. Food for thought for me.

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  5. Wordless... Brilliantly expressed...
    Loved these lines :
    "Let the dark sky twinkle
    With the hope"

    Hope - The key to life!

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  6. Brilliant! So vibrant and joyful!!

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  7. a lovely ode to self, i'm there with you in the flock Sumana
    have a nice Wednesday

    much love...

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  8. A lyrical poem of life flowing through our veins each one of us connected to the other.

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  9. magical words that sing like a psalm of knowledge, this is a real emotional, image filled journey.

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  10. Sumana,

    A wonderfully painted image of a life journey, with its ups and downs, through your poetic words. The natural way, via the elements of life...

    Eileen

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  11. My Hope is built on nothing less. Lovely words, Sumana!

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  12. Superb. Wonderfully worded, Sumana.

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  13. Beautiful lines...what better way than to have a flowing life!

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  14. You've captured life's journey well.

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  15. What a beautiful poem this is! I especially love how it builds to its closing, from "I’ve loved this life
    In this long pilgrimage
    I have seen the sunrise
    The moonlit silver streams
    And also a Pole Star
    My wavy notes dream
    Of never losing the way."

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  16. This is an inspired write, Sumana. I love the way you define who you are by integrating little touchstones of physical surroundings you have passed through with a dreamy, transcendent narrative. Really exquisite.

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  17. brilliant composition, giving a message of positiveness necessary in today's life

    Identity

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  18. I think this has become one of my favorite poems by you. I love the words you've chosen to describe your journey.

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  19. Beautifully written, I could almost imagine your life. Just loved it, Sumana!

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  20. I like your extended metaphor, Sumana and the lovely word pictures you have included in this poem. I enjoyed reading it.

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  21. Wow....this is so beautiful...!!!

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